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1、概要写作示例与写作训练8【写作示例】【原文呈现】阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。No one would be willing to pay one-third of the price for the packaging or wrapping of what he or she purchases. But over-packaging has become a disease that leads to a massive waste of resources and contributes to environmental pollution in China.Be

2、hind this disease are some appalling figures. The wasted packaging materials are estimated to be worth about 280 billion yuan annually. And such packages and wrappings thrown away by customers make up half of the volume of solid waste in cities. And its percentage has been increasing. If the cost fo

3、r treating the solid waste is included, the money that has been wasted on over-packaging should be much higher.To produce paper packagings or wrappings, many more trees have to be cut down. But the packagings will then be thrown away by consumers. The same is true with plastic wrappings. Over-packag

4、ing also damage the interest of consumers when they have to spend quite a high percentage on something that they will have to throw into the dustbin. Product packaging and wrapping used to be very simple 30 years ago. Moon cakes were wrapped just in papers with a piece of red paper on top as tradema

5、rk. Shabby was the word many had used to criticize the way Chinese products were packaged. And shabby packaging was condemned for making Chinese products unattractive in the international market.It is reasonable to pay enough attention to packaging or wrapping products in such a manner that they can

6、 be appealing to customers eyes. But that does not definitely justify that packaging should even outshine what is inside.In the Chinese proverb, maidu huanzhu, the buyer returns the pearl and just keeps the case because the latter is too fancy and luxurious. The message from the proverb is that over

7、-packaging helps cultivate an unhealthy consuming mentality- to buy fancy-looking stuff but not what they really need. This is also against the principle of frugality and sustainable development.【思维路径】核心内容 本文是一篇议论文，全文共有六段。第一段提出了一个问题，即在中国，过度包装(over-packaging)已经造成了消费者多余的开支以及给环境带来了大量的废物污染。第二段则用数字进行了说明过

8、度包装造成的巨大的财力损失及固体污染。第三段告诉我们为了生产更多的包装纸，我们不得不砍伐更多的树木。第四段回顾了过度包装的历史缘由。第五段则表明了作者的态度，即包装不能掩盖货物本身的价值。第六段中，作者借“买椟还珠”这个成语告诉我们，过度包装助长了不健康的消费理念，即只重货物外表，不在乎货物本身的价值。写作思路(1)抓住文章论点，理清论证关系。原文为议论文，第一段就提出了文章的论点，然后第二、三两端是进一步通过数据等事实论证第一段中提出的要点。第四段引出历史事实，进一步深入分析问题的起源。第五、六两段又进一步通过辩证分析的方式，表明作者的立场和态度。(2)研读文中信息，灵活处理论据。论据是让论

9、点使人更易接受的支持性的事实材料。原文的第二、三两段就是通过数据进行摆事实、讲道理。而原文第四与第六段又引出历史与文化传统里面关于“包装”问题的看法。因而，在缩写的时候，我们就需要对论据进行适当的安排与处理：既要注重数据事实，又要照顾到“历史事件”在论证中所起的作用。(3)确立文章主题，合理安排结构。原文第一段话首先表明了文章的中心论点,即“Over-packaging has become a disease that leads to a massive waste of resources and contributes to environmental pollution in Chi

10、na”(要点1)；第二段用数据证明事实证明了文章的中心，即“Over-packaging has waste too much money on the packages and on the treatment of the solid waste” (要点2)；第三段又进一步指出了过度包装的另一个危害，即“To produce paper packagings or wrappings, many more trees have to be cut down” (要点3)；第四段回顾了人们之所以要过度包装的历史原因，即“Shabby packaging was condemned for

11、making Chinese products unattractive in the international market” (要点4)；第五段表达了作者对过度包装的态度，即“Packaging should not outshine what is inside” (要点5)；在第六段中，作者借“买椟还珠”这个成语故事，表明了文章的结论，即“Over-packaging helps cultivate an unhealthy consuming mentality” (要点6)。通过以上分析，我们可以发现原文的论述结构：提出论点(要点1)-论据论证(要点2、3)-回顾历史(要点4)-

12、表明态度(要点5)-得出结论(要点6)。那么在缩写的时候，我们就必须首先确定采取何种表达顺序，完成对原文中心的表述。参考范文 Shabby packaging was once criticized for making Chinese products unattractive in the international market(要点4), but now over-packaging has caused an increase of environmental pollution(要点1), let alone a huge waste of money on the package

13、s and the treatment of the solid waste(要点2), and many more trees being cut down for the packages(要点3). Besides, over-packaging helps cultivate an unhealthy consuming mentality(要点6). So, please remember that packaging should not outshine what is inside(要点5).(75 words)范文解析 范文把要点4放在缩写的开头，首先交代了过度包装的历史缘由

14、，然后整合要点1，从而引出本文的中心论点。之后，范文的第一句又用一个衔接词let alone把作为分论点(论据)的要点2、3也整合在一个句子里面，这样就使得表述更加紧凑。然后，范文又把作为结论的要点6作为另一个论述的核心，并且用衔接词besides实现了与前文的连贯一致的表达。范文最后用so引出作者对过度包装的态度(要点5)，并结束了文章的缩写。这种安排显得自然而又流畅。提炼归纳 1、关注对论述中心的提炼。议论文一般会在行文中表现出极强的观点或、态度或个人倾向，所以在通读全文的过程中，需要首先抓住文章的中心论点、论据以及各个部分之间的层次关系。同时，也必须关注作者的论述方法及写作特点。2、强调

15、论述的连贯一致性。由于议论文中有鲜明的观点或个人倾向性的表达，而且有时作者的写作又不一定是按照常规的方法进行，因而在缩写的时候，我们就需要分清事实、论据与论点，以及各个部分之间的逻辑关系，从而实现意义表达的连贯性。例如，范文对要点4与要点5的处理就是处于对表述时的意义连贯的考虑。【写作演练】1.阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。Diet Coke, diet Pepsi, diet pills, no-fat diet, vegetable dict.We are surrounded by the word diet everywhere we look and liste

16、n. We have so easily been attracted by the promise and potential of diet products that we have stopped thinking about what diet products are doing to us. We are paying for products that harm us psychologically and physically.Diet products significantly weaken us psychologically. On one level, influe

17、nced by diet products, people tend to watch their weight rather than their diet. Diet products make us Jump over the thinking stage and go straight for the scale(秤)instead. All we have to do is to recognize the word diet in food labels in the supermarket. On another level, diet products make people

18、believe that gain comes without pain, and that life can be without resistance and struggle. For example, every time we have a zero-calorie drink, we are telling ourselves without our awareness that we dont have to work to get results.The danger of diet products lies not only in the psychological eff

19、ects they have on us, but also in the physical harm that they cause. Diet foods can indirectly harm our bodies because consuming them instead of healthy foods means we are preventing our bodies from having basic nutrients. Diet foods and diet pills contain zero calorie only because the diet industry

20、 has created chemicals to produce these wonder products. Diet products may not be nutritional, and the chemical that go into diet products are potentially dangerous.Now that we are aware of the effects that diet products have on us, it is time to seriously think about buying them. Losing weight lies

21、 in the power of minds, not in the power of chemicals. Once we realize this, we will be much better able to resist diet products, and therefore prevent the potential harm that comes from using them._2.阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。These days, football is one of the most popular sports in the world. Give

22、n that Neil Armstrong wanted to take a football to the Moon, we could even say that it is also the most popular sport out of this world! The history of the game goes back over two thousand years to Ancient China. It was then known as cuju(kick ball), a game using a ball of animal skins with hair ins

23、ide. Goals were hung in the air. Football as we know it today started in Great Britain, where the game was given new rules. That football is such a simple game to play is perhaps the basis of its popularity. It is also a game that is very cheap to play. You dont need expensive equipment; even the ba

24、ll doesnt have to cost much money. All over the world you can see kids playing to their hearts content with a ball made of plastic bags; just like Pele did when he was a boy. Another factor behind footballs global popularity is the creativity and excitement on the field. It is fun enough to attract

25、millions of people. You do not have to be a fan to recognize the skill of professional player-how they use their bodies to pass, score and defend can be amazing to see-or to feel the excitement of a game ending with a surprising twist. Whats more, football has become one of the best ways for people

26、to communicate: it does not require words, but everyone understands it. It breaks down walls and brings people together on and off the field. Take, for example, the famous football game on Christmas Day 1914. World War I had broken out months before, but British and German soldiers put down their gu

27、ns and played football together-one moment of peace to remember during years of conflict. “Some people believe football is a matter of life and death, . “said Bill Shankly, the famous footballer and manager. “I can assure you it is much, much more important than that.” This might sound funny, but on

28、e only has to think about the Earth to realize that our planet is shaped like a football._3.阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇 60 词左右的内容概要。Teenagers fitness is now a major concern and physical exercise is very important. It reduces stress and improves fitness. Exercise makes your body strong and helps you to keep the

29、right body weight. Sports scientists offer the following advice to teenagers: First, find out your present level of fitness. Then you can design a programme that will help you become healthier.There are three levels of fitness that need a change of lifestyle. Overweight means that the person gets ve

30、ry little exercise and often has a serious weight problem. Inactive means that the person does not join in many physical activities, but is not seriously overweight. Active refers to people who take part in sports and other physical activities, but do not have a high fitness level.According to exper

31、ts, overweight teenagers should work out to keep healthy. Ride a bike, play volleyball or basketball for a while, and go for a twenty-minute walk each day. All these will help to burn calories. Inactive teenagers should do similar activities, but add some bending and stretching exercises, such as pu

32、sh-ups and sit-ups, starting with twenty of each a day. Inactive people can take a little more exercise than overweight people because their bodies are stronger. The same rule is also suitable for active teenagers.Experts also suggest one hour a week or more on running and other forms of intensive e

33、xercise, together with fifteen minutes a day spent on stretching and bending activities. They are really important in order to prevent injuries. Some weight-training and other body-strengthening exercises could also be planned in the programme in order to increase the persons strength._4.阅读下面短文，根据其内

34、容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。The famous classical pianist, Kong Xiangdong, surprised his fans last week by giving a concert combining classical music with Chinese folk music. Kong explained that he tried this because he wanted to create something new. As a musician, playing the same music in different cities of t

35、he world is very boring, says Kong. He also feels that playing Chinese folk music on the piano can help bring it to the rest of the world.Music has always been part of Kongs world. As his mother was a great music lover, he lived with music from birth. But it wasnt always easy for the young Kong Xian

36、gdong. His mother couldnt buy him a piano until he was seven. She had to draw piano keys on a piece of paper so that he could learn to play as early as possible. The 5-year-old Kong would practice on the paper piano as his mother clapped the rhythm. He was made to practice the piano so much that, at

37、 times, he thought about giving up. However, he didnt quit, and he became a great pianist. In 1986,at the age of 18,he became the youngest prize winner in Moscows Tchaikovsky International Competition. He went on to win awards in competitions across the world.Because of Kongs talent and hard work, h

38、e became famous worldwide. But after years of performing, he felt that in some ways he had lost his identity. This is why he went back to his roots and rediscovered the beauty in Chinese folk music. He began experimenting with different styles and his Dream Tour Concert is the result.Kongs new exper

39、iment in Chinese folk music is so important to him that he even changed his appearance. When he arrived at his concert last week, he had shaved off all his hair! Since his music style was new, he decided his hairstyle had to be new too!Whether Kong is changing his appearance or transforming his musi

40、c, he is a pioneer in music today. The concert last week was such a success that Kongs Dream Tour Concert is expected to run for the next two years in Beijing, Shanghai, and other main cities before going to Paris and New York._5.阅读下面短文，根据其内容写一篇60词左右的内容概要。Electric car sales around the world rose by

41、54 percent in 2017, taking global stock across the three-million threshold (门槛), the International Energy Agency (IEA) said in a report on Wednesday. In China, the worlds biggest market for electric vehicles, sales also grew by about half but their market share remained small at 2.2 percent. In Norw

42、ay, electric vehicles have by far the worlds highest market share, with 39.2 percent, according to the IEA.“Supportive policies and cost reductions are likely to lead to significant growth in the market uptake of electric vehicles in the outlook period to 2030,” the report said, If policymakers hono

43、r their current commitments to the environment, “the number of electric light-duty vehicles on the road would reach 125 million by 2030,” it added. And if policy ambitions develop further, that number could become as high as 220 million by 2030, it said. But the IEA said that in order for the cars o

44、f the future to overtake their petrol and diesel-powered (柴油动力)competitors, governments will have to take the lead. “The main markets by numbers (China) and sales share (Norway) have the strongest policy push,” the IEA said. “Looking ahead, the strongest current policy signals come from electric car

45、 policies in China and California, as well as the European Unions recent proposal on CO2 emissions (排放)standards for 2030. ”The EU has committed to cutting 40 percent of its greenhouse gas emissions from 1990 levels, and to improving its use of renewable energy by at least 27 percent. France, home t

46、o Europes second-biggest car industry after Germany, has gone further by announcing a plan to end sales of petrol and diesel vehicles by 2040, as part of an ambitious plan to meet its targets under the Paris climate accord (条约). Electric vehicles use batteries instead of petrol or diesel fuel, thereby massively reducing their damage to the environment. Bu